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| Sep 26, 2006 7:42 pm | | Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | I thought it might be a good idea for us to have a place to get an honest critique on our classified ads.
This way we can tweak the ad before we let it out into the world.
Ryze rules do apply here, so if it's inappropriate I will have to delete it.
Only post your ad in this section for critiques.
I'll try to get to everyone's ad as soon as possible. Have fun.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Sep 27, 2006 3:23 am | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
Would you like some help with this?
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://b2bconnection.com
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals! ___________________________________________
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| Sep 27, 2006 3:27 am | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
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| Sep 28, 2006 1:32 am | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Absolutely! I intend for everyone to put in their constructive crticism. I think that would help people out more than just hearing my opinion all the time. So who wants to be first?
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| Sep 28, 2006 3:55 am | | re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
Uh, I think I WAS first, wasn't I?
OK.... who wants to be first after me? (Cuz I was early!!)
:) :) :) :)
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://b2bconnection.com
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals! ___________________________________________
PS. If you would like up to the minute residential property information or just useful tips about your home, check out eHomeVersity - http://ehomeversity-network.ryze.com/
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| Sep 28, 2006 2:43 pm | | re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Very good Althea.
I must have missed that when I made my post.
I wouldn't change a thing.
From reading the ad, I know exactly what you do and what you're looking for. Great job.
Okay so who's next? Come on don't be shy...
DeAnna Spencer
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| Sep 28, 2006 2:57 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Okay well here's mine.
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| Sep 28, 2006 4:04 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
You see how different your 'ad' is to mine, DeAnna? Your ad works great for me because it is in short paragraphs that enable me to take in the benefits (to me) of your service, without devoting much time to it.
In my case, because I am in such a personal business (real estate) - consider that I deal with a product where people undress, clean their teeth, shower, sleep and yes, even become intimate - my ad needs to be more conversational, because I have to build a rapport with the reader.
When writing ads, one's product governs the way that it must be written. The more personal the product, the more important it is to build trust and convey sincerity.
My question to you and other members, DeAnna, is: did my ad paint a picture of me, as a real estate professional?
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://b2bconnection.com
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals! ___________________________________________
PS. If you would like up to the minute residential property information or just useful tips about your home, check out eHomeVersity - http://ehomeversity-network.ryze.com/
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| Oct 01, 2006 6:50 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Yes it certainly did.
It also was concise and to the point. That's what made it effective for me.
Most people don't have a lot of time to devote to reading an ad.
Therefore, the more you can say with fewer words, the better the ad.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Oct 02, 2006 3:06 am | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Okay here's another one for you to chew on...
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| Oct 03, 2006 7:44 pm | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Dana Neal | | Okay I really liked all the ads, but this one about the VA was quick, informative and to the point w/o being too wordy. Private Reply to Dana Neal |
| Oct 03, 2006 8:49 pm | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
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| Oct 05, 2006 2:33 am | | re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Dana,
This is an excellent ad.
Again, it's short, sweet and to the point.
It doesn't leave me guessing what services you offer.
Great job!
DeAnna Spencer
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| Oct 05, 2006 11:52 am | | re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Dana Neal | | Thank you! I was wondering if you forgot about me (smile).... Private Reply to Dana Neal |
| Oct 08, 2006 4:55 am | | re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
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| Dec 08, 2006 7:49 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | I just wanted to remind everyone that we still have an ad critique thread. This is the one place where advertising is allowed.
The one catch is that by posting your ad here, you open yourself to an honest critique of your ad. Don't let that scare you.
It's better to know that there is a problem with your ad here than after you've spent money to run it.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Dec 09, 2006 2:08 am | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | | OK, Glenn..... you're not going to like me for this!
Firstly, there is absolutely nothing that compels me to read this ad! No alluring headlines, no CAPITALS in headings to catch my attention and nothing in the content to grab me!
I understand that you are excited about your product but the object of this exercise is to get ME excited - and I am not!
Secondly, pay attention to punctuation. Use of commas instead of periods, capitals where none are needed and no capitals where one should be used, causes the reader to halt, where they should be flowing to your next point.
I do like how you mention the benefit to the consumer - this is good but you can make more of this technique.
I understand that any normal ad would have color, images etc and I have accounted for that, but try to create more of a visual - the reader should be able to PICTURE what they would look like after taking your products and this should compel them to immediately pick up the phone and place an order!
Speaking of which, you have no call to action (click here or call now!) - don't expect your reader to assume that they should click on your links..... they need to be TOLD what to do! CALL NOW! WHAT ARE YOU WAITING FOR? ARE YOU AGING PREMATURELY? SEE THOSE LITTLE LINES CREEPING IN UNDER YOUR EYES? These are all statements that your reader will respond to - then tell them what to do.... HAVE YOU PLACED YOUR ORDER YET? CALL NOW!
Also, create a little scarcity ~ THIS SPECIAL OFFER CLOSES ON [date]! Scarcity will have customers beating down your door!
Oh, one last thing..... I wouldn't mix the photographic with the health - it's like chalk and cheese, which causes the reader to go 'oh... they can't make up their minds what product to promote - uh, I guess I won't buy either!'
To use Denise Michaels saying: A confused mind ALWAYS says 'No'! Pick your product category and go with that.
OK..... I'm ducking the tomatoes, now?
Wanna try again?
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://www.OCstaarz.com
Search over 38,000 homes at my web site: http://www.OCSTAARZ.COM
___________________________________________
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals!
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| Dec 09, 2006 6:35 pm | | Glenn ~ re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | | Glenn,
Why did you remove your ad? Now my critique makes no sense!
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://www.OCstaarz.com
Search over 38,000 homes at my web site: http://www.OCSTAARZ.COM
___________________________________________
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals!
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| Jan 14, 2007 4:35 pm | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Dana Neal | | This is really good for those that want to get advice on their ad's before they place them on another thread on a web page. Private Reply to Dana Neal |
| Jan 16, 2007 6:40 am | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
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| Feb 01, 2007 10:23 pm | | re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Lamar, I think you need to give your customers a little more information in your ad. It's not really clear what you expect them to do as a result of reading the ad. What is going to happen when I call the toll free number? Will I get a report? Will I get added to a mailing list?
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| Feb 05, 2007 6:57 am | | re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
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| Feb 05, 2007 9:16 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Melodieann Whiteley | | I don't really advertise much for HelmsBriscoe. Site selection is mostly cold-calling or referrals.
Would be interested in critiques of ads I use for my other various enterprises. This is what I run in classified ads for SiteBuildIt. What do you think?
"Why build JUST a Web site...
when you COULD build a Web BUSINESS?"
http://buildit.sitesell.com/wealthtogether.html
Melodieann Whiteley
Regional Manager, HelmsBriscoe
479-790-9953
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| Feb 07, 2007 3:25 am | | re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Melodieann,
I like your site build it ad, but try to find a way to make it unique. When you're promoting an affiliate program that hundreds of other people are promoting, it's really important to make your ad sound different from the other affiliates.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Feb 08, 2007 6:16 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Marla Martindale | | Hi everyone, I am new to this board and would like to get your feedback on my ad. :)
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| Feb 08, 2007 8:03 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Whew.
That was a long ad. It was very informative. I guess the medium that you use would determine how long you make your ad. I just know that most people on the internet have a very short attention span so they may not read your whole ad. Maybe if you bold some words or use more white space, that would make the ad more readable. Just my 2 cents on the ad. Other than it being long, it was pretty good.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Feb 09, 2007 3:49 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Marla Martindale | | Hi DeAnna,
Thank you for your 2 cents. I thought it might be a bit
long but I don't know how else to get the information
out that people need to know. Any suggestions?
As far as the bold and all, can't really do that on here,
but when I use it elsewhere I do.
I appreciate your feedback.
Peace & Blessings,
Marla
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| Feb 09, 2007 4:26 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
Hi Marla,
I agree with DeAnna in that you could use more white space and more headings to punctuate your ad. This, because with an ad that long, most people are inclined to 'skim' or surface read.
Now, if you were to ask Denise Michaels about your ad, she would say "If the reader is interested in the topic, no ad is too long - but if they are not interested, it can't be too short!"
So, what I am saying is that although your ad is long, this is not necessarily a bad thing!
I think what grabbed me the most was the thought of toxins entering my body through my skin! EEeeeeew! This makes sense especially since you mention the nicotine and birth control patch! I also liked your use of bullet points.
Also, with the cosmetic changes to your copy (which we KNOW is difficult on a Ryze post), your ad would carry that much more punch! We, as Ryze readers, just have to imagine where those cosmetic enhancements would be!
Try using the 'pull' method, rather than the 'push' method - in other words, instead of just stating facts, throw in a couple of questions that the reader will stop and say 'Wow, yes... that's me!" to GRAB your reader and make sure that they read on. Usually we do this in the headings, so that they will read the next paragraph.
So, in all, I thought it was a great ad - good job!
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://www.OCstaarz.com
Search over 38,000 homes at my web site: http://www.OCSTAARZ.COM
___________________________________________
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals!
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| Feb 11, 2007 9:41 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Marla Martindale | | Hi Althea,
Thanks for your tips.
I will put some questions in it and shorten it some and repost it.
Peace & Blessings,
Marla
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| Feb 21, 2007 6:45 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Kim Easter | | Hello everyone,
Please critique mine next. I've done my best to check all of the hyperlinks as well as spelling and grammar. What else can I do to make the whole site better?
http://www.HigherLevelServices.com
Thanks a bunch,
Kimberly Easter
http://hshbusiness-network.ryze.com
http://www.HigherLevelServices.com
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| Feb 22, 2007 2:36 am | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
OK, Kimberly... here goes:
I like the fact that it's all on one page, BUT.....
* My first reaction was that the graphic in the banner was squished and that jarred me. On closer scrutiny, I realized that you may have done this to avoid the white background of the 'Higher Level Services' logo bleeding into the blue sky area. Perhaps you could crop some of the graphic?
* I like what you have done with the gray sidebar (next to the body text) - is there any way that you can line up the division between the brown 'Higher Level Services' background and the blue cell, to the right of it. The mal-alignment takes away from the message.
* Being the age that I am, I like the LARGE text (oh, thank you, thank you, thank you!) and I also like the way that you have drawn attention to key points by using red font. Wills being what Wills are (something no-one really believes that they need!!!!) I don't think that you are describing the graveness of the alternative, sufficiently.
You might as an example ask the question "Do you know that your home could go into Probate for two years or more, if your loved one died 'intestate' (without a valid Will), during which time, how would you live?"
You might also consider asking your readers what they would do, if they went into in a coma - would they want the plug pulled? When you can't speak, you are without control! A legal and valid Will, speaks for you.
If you are going to use periods at the end of paragraphs, then use them at the end of every paragraph (after 'Pre-Paid Legal Life Events Plan')
* "ACCESS LINK WILL BE SENT TO EMAIL ADDRESS PROVIDED" ~ change to 'E-MAIL'
* Now, the form:
I am not too happy with your choice of colors, here. Black text on dark blue is difficult to read - consider white text on dark blue. You might also want to space the 'e-mail' field from the 'phone' field like the other fields.
And yes, I did test your hyperlink and IT WORKS! Good job!
A nice web page advertisement - I like it!
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://www.OCstaarz.com
Search over 38,000 homes at my web site: http://www.OCSTAARZ.COM
___________________________________________
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals!
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| Feb 22, 2007 4:44 am | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Kim Easter | | Thanks Althea. I'll get to work on it right away and resubmit. I really need to follow through and check how it looks with several browsers as well. Which browser did you use?
Kimberly Easter
http://hshbusiness-network.ryze.com
http://www.HigherLevelServices.com
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| Feb 22, 2007 5:40 am | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Althea Garner | |
I use IE, Kimberly.
The main thing is to have several people critique your ad - more eyes will catch more problems and you will end up with something FANTASTIC!
BTW. Have you considered having a landing page (web page) and then using this (sales letter) as a way to boost your web site?
:)
ALTHEA GARNER (Star Real Estate)
Realtor
http://www.altheagarner.com
http://www.OCstaarz.com
Search over 38,000 homes at my web site: http://www.OCSTAARZ.COM
___________________________________________
Remember... I am NEVER too busy for your referrals!
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| Feb 24, 2007 9:49 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | I agree with Althea about the black text on blue background. That was really hard to read. I do like that everything was on one page. I also like using the red to empasize certain points.
DeAnna Spencer
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| Mar 01, 2007 7:50 pm | | re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Okay guys, I've made some modifcations to my website. Let me know what you think.
http://www.deannaspencer.com
DeAnna Spencer
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| Apr 03, 2007 3:33 pm | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Let me know what you guys think of this site, please.
http://www.snipurl.com/deannastog
Thanks in advance for your help.
DeAnna Spencer
DeAnna Spencer's Virtual Assistant Service
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| Apr 03, 2007 4:37 pm | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Irina Starr | | Hello DeAnna,
Just reading the words "Peach Pecan Pepper Preserve Sauce" make my mouth water!! :-)
The site looks very clean and easy to navigate. I am not sure if it's possible to add pictures to the front. That would get people even more hungry :-)
One thing I would change right now is just add one line of space between the paragraphs to make it easier to read.
Hope this helps,
Irina Private Reply to Irina Starr |
| Apr 04, 2007 2:39 am | | re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | It does help tremendously. Thanks!
DeAnna Spencer
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| Jul 30, 2007 7:58 pm | | re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Don't forget that you can get a free honest evaluation of your ad by posting it to this thread.
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| Jul 30, 2007 8:57 pm | | Great network. | # |
carole harris | | When I have my house a little quieter, I will submit an ad. I will try to keep it concise....I don't think I do a bad job, but it's always better to get someone elses opinion.
carole
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| Jul 31, 2007 7:57 am | | Some Helpful Links Writing Ads (re: Ad critique thread...) | # |
T.E.A.M. Mom! | |
Hi All, I thought I would share this list of links for those who are looking for the free Ad Critique DeAnna is giving. I have read thru each one and have applied many of the techniques and tips myself over the past year or so. I do hope that these will be helpful too. Have a wonderful day, Patricia
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3 Elements to a Deal-Sealing Classified Ad
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/marketing-general/3-elements-to-a-deal-sealing-classified-ad.html
6 Basic and Simple Ad Tips
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/advertising/six-basic-and-simple-ad-tips.html
6 Powerful Copywriting Tips
http://www.ryze.com/posttopic.php?topicid=816437&confid=1022
6 Steps To Successful Classified Ads
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/six-steps-to-successful-classified-ads.html
7 Secrets To Writing A Successful Ad
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/advertising/7-secrets-to-writing-a-successful-ad.html
7 Steps To Writing The Perfect Ad
http://www.businesshighlight.org/writing/copywriting/7-steps-to-writing-the-perfect-ad.html?Highlight_Sess=17dc3056d577ae46e80a93fa98e8a6eb
10 AD Copy Tips You Can Take To The Bank!
http://www.internetseer.com/services/article.xtp?id=26231
Classifieds with Localized Shopping
http://www.businesshighlight.org/computers-and-internet/computers-internet-general/classifieds-with-localized-shopping.html
Get More out of Newspaper Ads
http://www.givetogetmarketing.com/tips-adresponse.html
How to Create Effective Advertising with AIDA
http://www.morningstarmultimedia.com/html/2005/02/how-to-create-effective-advertising.asp
How To Make An Irresistible Ad
http://www.ryze.com/posttopic.php?topicid=738129&confid=1265
How to Write Headlines that Get Read
http://www.businessknowhow.com/marketing/headlines.htm
Online Classifieds Outclass Newspapers
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/advertising/online-classifieds-outclass-newspapers.html
Online Classifieds with Angles
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/marketing-general/online-classifieds-with-angles.html
There's Power in little Classified Ads
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/there-s-power-in-little-classified-ads.html
Three Simple Ways to Make Your Classifieds Sell
http://articlesarchives.netfirms.com/aa2.html
Tips On Writing a Successfull Ad
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/site-promotion/tips-on-writing-a-successfull-ad.html
Where To Place Classified Ads To Build Your Business
http://www.businesshighlight.org/marketing/advertising/where-to-place-classified-ads-to-build-your-business.html?Highlight_Sess=17dc3056d577ae46e80a93fa98e8a6eb
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| Aug 03, 2007 8:25 pm | | re: Some Helpful Links Writing Ads (re: Ad critique thread...) | # |
DeAnna Troupe, Video Marketing Specialist | | Those are some great links! I can always count on you to make me forget what I was supposed to be doing! LOL
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| Sep 02, 2007 4:06 pm | | how's this?/(re: Ad critique thread...) | # |
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| Sep 16, 2007 10:45 pm | | re: Some Helpful Links Writing Ads (re: Ad critique thread...) | # |
carole harris | | wow, thanks...I'm learning so much today, and I will get through these!
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| Sep 16, 2007 10:49 pm | | re: Ad critique thread... | # |
carole harris | | I'm going to be brave: Here's mine.
Looking for shopping or a free business to join? Look no further. Stop by my website, and if you need a place to have a vendor or online party, I have that too!
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Thanks guys!
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| Sep 17, 2007 12:57 am | | re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Sylvia Buetow | | Hi Carole,
It's a good, clear ad. I do like one ad - one business. I spent some time looking through your website. I like a simple, one business website with a lead capture. You need to talk to people. Could you do a series of websites on Free Webs for instance? Very simple and no cost.
Sylvia Buetow
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| Sep 17, 2007 5:13 pm | | re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
carole harris | | Thanks Sylvia for the critique on my ad. I take it you don't like the website. I was working on bravenet, and wet paint on something....but 80% of affiliates, that have more than one business...like I do, do have all their businesses on one site. What do you mean I need to talk to people? I'm not sure I understand.
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| Sep 18, 2007 3:46 pm | | re: re: re: re: Ad critique thread... | # |
Sylvia Buetow | | Hi Carole,
Sorry. I meant (talk to people) that you need to capture their information to establish a relationship and encourage them to join your business. You're doing a great job building the site.
Sylvia Buetow
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